17 Elevator Pitch No. 2
Unfortunately, the feedback I received on my first elevator pitch was mostly positive without any advice for improvement. I still reflected on my own pitch and reevaluated some parts of the pitch in accordance with my progress since then. I put a greater emphasis on the function of the Defoginator, and attempted to appeal to my primary target market.

Hey I think your second post was much more precise than your first. I liked the way you explained your attributed and your contributions to the field. I think an employer would find relevance in what you're saying. My struggle once again was executing what I had written out for my pitch. On the other hand, I felt more comfortable with speaking about myself and the skill set I believe I can bring to an employer. These pitches certainly require an air of confidence and clarity, regardless of your attributes and skills.
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ReplyDeleteI definitely think that the function of your product was better explained this time and it makes it easier to understand for customers that are not even familiar with similar products. I do think that if you were going to use this pitch with am investor, they would absolutely love your pitch. Good job!
Hi Joseph!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I really enjoyed your elevator pitch. You seem very passionate about solving this business issue, and I believe that with this pitch, you can achieve just that! Your use of a personal scenario that potential consumers could relate to really pushed your idea home, as consumers will be made aware of this void in their lives and immediately want a product such as yours to resolve it. Again, great job!
Joseph, That is not a problem at all that you got all positive feedback. I think that this post was pretty solid but you should work a little bit on the confidence in your voice when you are talking, I want you to really sell it to me instead of just explaining what you are selling. Besides that you had a good posture and your pitch was pretty solid.
ReplyDeleteHey Joseph! I think you did a great job with this post. You did a great job explaining exactly why I would want to buy your product. You showed the benefits along with the negatives that your product would help to avoid. You did a great job with the video but I would recommend being a little more confident. Maybe do a few practice runs and do a few takes. Other than that great job!
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